Two Writing Benchmarks:

In grade school, the good nuns built a solid foundation for good writing through two important benchmarks: (1) Parts of Speech; and (2) Sentence Diagraming. They identified the bones of the sentence and interaction of words, within a graphic setting to learn them.

The eight Parts of Speech comprise: Noun, Pronoun, Verb, Adjective, Adverb, Prepositions, Conjunction and Interjection. I accepted the first seven without question, but never understood why grammarians included the Interjection, as it only expresses emotion, usually followed by an exclamation point, and has no grammatical relation to the rest of the sentence. Nevertheless, an Interjection remained a Part of Speech, while the erudite grammarians omitted an essential Part of Speech; namely, the Articles: “a” and “the”, also known as Determiners, which comprise the most often used sentence words, particularly by children.

Sentence Diagrams started as an early exercise to identify and place the Parts of Speech. At first, it was easy because early childhood sentences contained few words, mostly nouns and verbs. I recall liking the process, which seemed more like solving a puzzle than doing work. The initial diagram comprised a horizontal line divided by a vertical line. The student wrote the sentence subject, always a noun or pronoun, on the left; the predicate, always a verb on the right.  As sentence length expanded, the diagram added a second vertical line, to the right of the predicate, to accommodate the direct object or a predicate adjective., completing the main skeleton of the sentence.

In addition to identifying the Parts of Speech, diagramming taught us where to fit the modifiers. Every other Part of Speech, except for the vagabond, Interjection, modified the subject, predicate or direct object. Adjectives always modified a noun; adverbs usually modified the verb, but could also modify another adverb or an adjective. Though an Adjective only modifies a noun or pronoun, an adverb may modify another adjective, a common source of mis-identification. Nevertheless, with five of the Parts of Speech placed, only Prepositions, Conjunctions, and the lowly Articles remained.

As in all things, the sentence diagraming process became more complicated with the addition of words and the introduction to Passive Voice, which moved sentence action in the opposite direction.  Nevertheless, sentence diagraming fostered clear, concise writing.  No one wished to diagram a wordy line.

A Sheer Curtain

I have not written any posts for awhile, just catching up on other matters.  To continue the theme of Ekphrastic poems, I refer to a photograph depicting a window covering — a sheer curtain billowing inwardly from the sea breeze over a covered bed, with indistinct images appearing through the window frame.  It brings a thoughtful, relaxing  moment, as if one is laying in a swaying hammock on a lazy summer day.   

A Sheer Curtain 

A sheer curtain billows
With the ocean breeze
To and fro,
Rise and fall,
Like a swaying hammock.

A beach comber at rest 
On an inviting bed,
Breathing in,
Breathing out,
Like the pulse of the tide. 

Unclear images peer
Through the transition piece,
Back and forth,
Up and down,
Like the yaw of a ship.

A pleasant summer day
Spent in soft ambiance.
Now and then
Here and gone
Like a mid-winter dream.

A Curio Piece

Have you ever been shown an art painting, which falls between “What is it?” and “Oh, my word.”  Before me rests a picture of an abstract painting featuring bright colors: Yellow, blue and green, with a few dabs of white dangling unattached near the center.  The bright blue images appear to resemble flowers, with pedals haphazardly arranged among fuzzy green, leaves of a sort, on an intense yellow background, emphasized in places with some strong brush strokes. My initial reaction:  “Wow!  this painting would brighten up a room,” but describing it presents a challenge.  First of all, what does one write about when unsure of the subject?  Lets give it a try:   

A Curio Piece

To a blank canvas,
Add earthly colors,
Yellow, blue, and green,
With a touch of white.

Yielding abstract art,
With obscure meaning.
A flower of sorts,
In a sunlit place?

An urge to imbue
Oneself in the piece
But where to focus?
Yellow, blue or green.

Yellow, for bright sun?
Blue, for rare roses?
Green, blending the two;
White, a diversion?

Blue roses ponder 
Opposites: true love,
Or unrequited
Love —a subtle trap. 

“How do you like it?”
A pause, to reflect,
On prudent response:
“How Interesting!”

When hung on a wall,
A curio piece,
Adds bold ambiance
To brighten decor.

A Rear View Review

I wish to write an Ekphrastic poem about an art painting, which depicts a woman standing within a panorama of color, with tints of yellow, gray, blue, purple, green, white — and flesh.  Though “flesh” may not be an official color, it dominates the portrait space.  An unclad woman stands facing front, so the observer sees only her back side, discreetly covered in pastel paints to conceal certain features, while showing others.  Her hair is wrapped in a high updo on her head, and her arms appear folded across her body in the front, possibly with her hands covering her invisible breasts in a display of modesty.

After considering a number of possible approaches, some titillatingly inappropriate, I settled on writing through the eyes of a budding, playful art student, who arrived late for class, thus obtaining the last seat in the studio.  Lets read what the pretend artist had to say:  

Arriving late for class,
My stool choice reduced 
To the only one left — 
Ample but, a rear view. 

I surveyed the bare scene 
To set up my palette: 
Flesh colors, a dark brown,
Yellow for light, some blue. 

Where to begin depends 
On one’s point of view. 
A frontal peer may start
Higher than from the back. 

A quick outline of form 
Brings focus to the rump, 
Well balanced, some jiggle 
With an ad-libbed scratch. 

In the end, I opted 
To mute her derrière 
With various pastels 
To titillate senses, 

And Imagination 
Of opulent cleavage 
Not viewable from 
My rear end seat.  

A Crane in the Neck

I wrote my last post two months ago, but used some of the time to tot-up some future posts — and then the time got away from me.  You know the old saying: “Tempus Fugit.”

Before my eyes rests a photograph of two Sandhill cranes in a bucolic scene, remindful of nature at its best.  One  crane wades calmly in the shallow water of a lake, while  another crane swoops down for a soft landing: feet apart, beak open, and wings outstretched forwardly, simulating a hug in the making. A good subject for a poem.  What could I write about this scene?  

I will add some gender identity, assuming the wader is female, wading with food on her mind; and the flying crane is male, seeking a romantic encounter.  If cranes could talk, imagine with me the tenor of a one-way conversation.   

“Hello, Little Lady,
Mind if I wade along,
To possibly ignite
A spark of interest? 

What’s your name, my lady?
I’d like to call on you,
And wade webbed foot to foot
In a lake of beauty.

Please do not walk so fast,
Little lady, slow down.
Lets bide and talk awhile
About courting love’s whirl.

And if the urge excites,
We can bow, flap and dance 
The mating ritual 
To confirm our union.

We could be so happy,
You and me together,
Loving each other like
Bygone generations.

Please harken, dear lady.
Stop wading elsewhither.
Pause for a brief moment
To discuss life’s grand plan.

Oh well, no love today!
My prowl and stride
Unsuitable — for now.  
Love does not come easy.” 

Ding, Ping, Ring!

The subject for an ekphrastic poem, shows a bizarre painting, resembling a human head in an obvious state of mental or electrical shock, with multi-colored outlines, and staccato geometric figures inside and outside the skull.  The poor guy is abuzz with apparent noise, electrical shock or stressful thoughts.  The eyes are wide, the mouth is open, the ear encircled with erratic lines and colors.  What is the viewer to think?  

The picture appears as disturbing to the observer, as it must be to the subject.  It reminds me of someone who just experienced a jangling noise, like standing too close to a giant gong when struck, or an electric shock, like coursing electric current through one’s veins — frazzled, agitated, unhinged.

In my poem below, I related the image as someone who is overwrought with the omnipresent, constant smart phone dings, pings and rings, longing for an escape to an unreachable place.

Ding, Ping, Ring!

My head is awhirl in
Pinging sounds, sights and vibes,
Before my eyes
Between my ears
Inside my head
Unceasing messaging,
Likes, shares and emojis,
Expecting immediate response
And photos in real time,
Stored forever online.

My eyes ever bloodshot,
My ears clogged with noise,
My brain fried with squiggly lines,
Making a monster out of me.

Oh!  How I wish for an 
Ecclesiastes moment:
A time to think
A time to chill
A time to talk
When TV aired in black and white,
To loll in shades of gray,
Before cell phones, Internet, 3D copy machines
To reflect in quietude
Without dings, rings or pings.

I long for the courage
To shut down everything,
To engage unplugged friends,
And enjoy life in the slow lane.

An Evening Stroll

In the middle of the Covid pandemic, an Ekphrastic poem contest presented a painting of a elegantly dressed woman, walking in a city covered in fog, wearing a brilliant scarlet gown.  Wispy fog covers her face, and parts of her body, so the observer can only see her torso and her left hand holding part of her dress, presumably to keep the bottom hem off the pavement as she walked.  Her face, right side and feet are obscured by the fog, as are other background elements.  Some trees are visible to her right and a faint outline of some multistoried buildings behind her, suggesting an urban setting. 

Some questions arise:  Who is she?  Where is she? What is her destination?  Why is she walking alone in such finery?  Even in clear sunshine, we may not be able to answer those questions, unless we spotted a well-known face or landmark to go by.  The whole portrait is beclouded in mystery, perhaps recalling the London fog in Jack the Ripper days.  

My poem submission described what I saw and felt, but failed to answer any of the questions.

An Evening Stroll

An evening stroll
Wearing a ball gown,
Elegant style,
Silken scarlet,
Blurred by wispy fog
Competing for attention.

Where is she going?
Why is she alone?
Does she wear a mask?
Does anyone care?

A pandemic thrives
In gatherings of
Tied dyed tees,
Red ball gowns,
No place to hide.
No place to go.